Content Suggestions
- Probably the most impressive thing about your presentation was your content. I felt as though your information was plentiful and important
-The highlighting in certain sections of some of the pieces you specifically gave what you were talking about a really good sense of clarity
-If I had to tell you to change anything, it would be to cut back on the introductory information. Some of the facts felt a little bit unnecessary with regards to the project
-A note, in the credits of your video essay, your last name is spelled wrong and the references aren't actually listed, so there's that as well
-Another note is that I didn't notice (or failed to notice) any content regarding your interviews. You don't have to use them, but I'm just giving you a heads up
Form Suggestions
-Overall, the video essay looked solid, I liked the incorporation of some videos with no narration, such as Neil Armstrong walking on the moon
-Another thing I thought was good was your use of both videos, graphs, maps, web articles, and still pictures in the video. The diversity definitely looked good
-From a creative standpoint, I feel as though the diversity you incorporated are more than satisfactory
-Some of the pictures were really low quality, such as the AIAA homepage. Try and look for any other images that are easier to read
Copy-Editing Suggestions
-As stated above, I would definitely actually add the actual citations in the credit sequences
-Also as stated above, try and replace some of the very pixel-heavy images in the video
Re-design Suggestions
-One thing that was slightly bothersome was a faint static in the background whenever you spoke into your microphone. If it is possible, try and move closer to the mic to eliminate this static. The static may just be because of the microphone of course. Just consider this as a minor gripe
-If anything, try and change the order in which you talk about your topic. The video kinda skipped around all over the place chronologically, I found myself trying to catch up with the content itself
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