What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
I felt as though the production phase went very smoothly. Last week in my reflection, I stated that I would only use my content outline a little bit, but I ended using that framework for quite a bit of my essay. I felt as though the outline helped me a noticeable amount when writing out the rough cut of my essay. Another thing is that I didn't really have any trouble writing the essay either. I did the whole thing in one sitting which is pretty astonishing.
What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.
Probably the biggest obstacle that I faced was trying to find sources that I could easily implement into my writing. The majority of mathematical rhetoric is in a language the most people don't understand and in a context that cannot be applied to anything except for the scientific topic that it specifically is talking about. I used direct quotes from these journals in my essay, but I couldn't find anything that actually fit the tone of my project. Hopefully by the end of the project I can find something more applicable, but for now this will have to do.
How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
For the most part, my pre-production and my production phases have gone quite well, so I feel as though my post-production phase should follow that pattern quite nicely. Other than that, if I can find an applicable source I think my project will be as good as I can make it.
How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?
How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?
Overall I feel as though it could be better since the organization of my whole essay isn't the best, but I do feel as though it's very effective at getting its point across and doesn't have too many convention errors. Overall I feel as though my project is well done.
Your essay was incredibly well written! My thoughts on the piece:
ReplyDelete1) Although some of the language was lost on me, as a non-math major, your selection of quotes was impressive. The quote on your third page was very clearly an a good example of your insertion at the beginning of the paragraph.
2) Most of the information you included in your paper is valid, however I very much disagree with your organization. The multitude of paragraphs is overwhelming; I think there is a way you could combine your paragraphs (maybe even use less examples).
3)As I mentioned previously, you are obviously well versed in the language of mathmatics, but I think that you might want to change the diction as your audience will not be (Also as as specific note: the way you describe the authors use of rhetoric, logos, ethos, and pathos, is not always the most clear).
4)I think that your concluding paragraph could be fleshed out a bit more. Your argument is present, but I think you could broaden it to the large society as a whole. Why do mathematicians write in these ways and how does it effect our interpretation of the field as a whole?