I peer reviewed Ben Barnett's essay about Thorium and Uranium reactors and their effects on the world. I'm not much off an expert in the field of nuclear energy, but I feel as though I could be a big help in respect to the form and the organization of the essay itself.
One thing I definitely learned from Ben's essay was to incorporate better transitions in my project. Overall, my video essay has pretty stagnant sections that don't connect to one another really well, but I feel as though I can use Ben's essay as an example for how to do this concept correctly.
Review:
One thing out of the way, I really had some trouble understanding the overall context of your essay. I can definitely tell that this essay's audience isn't for someone as ill-informed in the area of science as I am, but from I can see the information presented on the properties and consequences of the materials in the question seem very solid. Probably the biggest thing I could recommend to you is making your facts more comparative to one another. I understood your argument, but I had a little trouble understanding why your topic was a "big deal". One thing I did like about your essay was the flow of the whole thing. Paragraphs and sections transitioned from one another very smoothly.
Overall I think it's a good essay (an essay that my tiny pea-brain can't fully comprehend in fact).
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