I peer reviewed Malik's video essay, well, actually the script for his video essay. He doesn't quite have all the materials he needs for the video essay to be complete. Either way, considering that my genre for this project is the video essay as well, I feel as though I can lean a lot from Malik, as well as give him good advice.
One thing I learned from Malik's script is that I need to add in a little for information that shows why my argument is important. I feel as though my video essay is lacking in respect to pure hard facts on why this topic is a controversy. If I can add this to my project, I feel as though the final product will be a lot better.
Review:
First thing I noticed is that your video essay is very formal, almost to the point of overly formal. For a topic such as minimum wage, it makes sense to have the form of your video essay be this formal, but sometimes it seems like I'm going to be hearing a Microsoft Sam voice in your video essay. I guess my suggestion would to make the script not as stiff, if that makes sense. One thing I do think you have quite a good handle on is the information surround the topic at hand. I can tell you've really done your research in regards to minimum wage. Overall I think you're video essay has a lot of potential with this script.
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